Thread:Jiziqing/@comment-44386818-20200630203624

Please clearly cite the sources when you write about controversies — we want to be responsible editors, and a responsible editor should offer his or her readers an opportunity to draw their own conclusions.

Judging from your writing, I also have the following advice: if you want to say that event A caused event B, you must be extra careful not to let subjectivity interfere with your writing! If there is an official announcement, cite it. If there is an apology, cite it. If you cannot find a credible source, do not imply a causation.

Lastly, I recommend you think about your own writing goals. Do you want to provoke critical thinking? Do you want to encourage a respectful discussion? Do you want to say the person sucks instead? There is a huge difference between "lighting a match in the dark" and "assassinating the character." On the other hand, your second bullet point on the song's production quality sounds like hyperbole. The way it is worded does not help you achieve positive writing goals.

Your homework assignment is to rewrite the controversy section with respect to the guidelines mentioned above. It is due on July 7, seven (7) days from now. If no submission is found by the deadline, your current edits will be deleted.

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